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A Night of Magic by ~Nilocia:iconNilocia:



I sit down;
My legs have had enough for now

                                                                              I glimpse off,
                                             Into the night sky, mostly starless

I notice one star,
Or is it a plane?

                                                                                I stare at it,
                                                        Actively, erratically flashing

I watch for several minutes,
At this curious thing

                                                      I leave my seat momentarily,
                                                                          To wander a bit

I return, it has not moved,
Just above the tree-line

                                                                                     I realize:
                                                 It is not technology, it is nature

I gaze at this wonder,
What I’ve not seen before

                                                                  I marvel unblinkingly,
                                                                      At its show of light

I wander away mindlessly,
Pondering this phenomenon

                                                               And when I come back,
                                                                     It has disappeared
©2008 ~Nilocia
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A bit after that, a cloud, which lightning was just shooting across the sky but not touching the ground (i'm unsure what they're called) had appeared. I had only seen this a few times before; once the week before, once a few months back, a few months before that, and for the first time some time when I was 6-8. I watched it for a half hour, awe-struck by it. While I was watching, I noticed this sound, it sounded like it was coming from one of the posts of my back porch. I could only hear it when I faced the screen attached to it (oddly, not the other screen), and what's more, I heard it much better with my right ear than left. I couldn't tell what it was, much less describe it.

This happened friday night. And I must say, there was a lot of energy in the air. I could feel it.

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~jeevani:iconjeevani: May 11, 2008, 9:57:53 PM
Awesome! :D

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~Nilocia:iconNilocia: May 12, 2008, 4:06:02 AM
◄Thanks, Morgan! :heart: I'm Trying To Get Into Poetry/Prose =p

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~jeevani:iconjeevani: May 12, 2008, 5:36:40 PM
Yay! Well, I'm always here for critiques, suggestions, feedback, or any other read-through! :D :heart:

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Let's just say... My eyeball is swolen. (o.O)

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~Nilocia:iconNilocia: May 13, 2008, 4:29:02 AM
◄Great! Do You See Anything That's Off? Also, How Do I Italicize Words On This? =p

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~jeevani:iconjeevani: May 13, 2008, 2:44:21 PM
Not anything that's off, persay, but in my mind it could use some line breaks. That's just me, though. I'm big on the broken-line thing. Just through reading it, I've thought of where I would break the lines. Mind if I show ya? =P Of course, it's just my silly way of doing things, so ya certainly don't have to do it like that. :XD:

Oh, and in the "I notice one star, or is it a plane? line, it might help to have a question mark. :)

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Let's just say... My eyeball is swolen. (o.O)

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~Nilocia:iconNilocia: May 14, 2008, 4:06:19 AM
◄Sure! :aww:

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~Nilocia:iconNilocia: May 14, 2008, 4:07:41 AM
◄Sure, Show Me! :aww:

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~jeevani:iconjeevani: May 14, 2008, 4:25:34 PM
"I sit down;
My legs have had enough for now
I glimpse off,
Into the night sky,
Mostly starless.
I notice one star,
Or is it a plane?
I stare at it,
At its active, erratic flashing,
And I watch,
For several minutes
At this curious thing
I leave my seat
Momentarily,
Just to wander a bit.
I return,
It has not moved;
Just above the tree-line.
I realize:
It is not technology,
It is nature
I gaze at this wonder,
What I’ve not seen before
I marvel,
Unblinking
At its show of light
I wander away
Mindless,
Pondering this phenomenon
And when I come back,
It has disappeared.


Just my weirdo way of spacing lines. :shrug:

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Let's just say... My eyeball is swolen. (o.O)

98% of Deviants don't know the difference between "your" and "you're." If you're one of the 2% that wants to punch 'em, put this in your sig.
~Nilocia:iconNilocia: May 15, 2008, 4:12:50 AM
◄Hrm... Not Bad, I Suppose I Can Space Them Something Like That... Thanks! :heart:

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